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December 9, 2012
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Lights, presents, parties

maybe a moment to slow..

In a flurry of red, green, silver, and gold

December will come to go.

Those I care for already know-

everyday is extraordinary.

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December 9, 2012
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Very nice sentiment here... (you may want to correct the spelling of "to slow" I think you mean "too slow")

Wine is bottled poetry. ~ Robert Louis Stevenson
December 9, 2012
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love the simplicity of this. Very extraordinary indeed :)

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December 10, 2012
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I think he has it right TL.

A moment to slow down and reflect.......

 

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December 10, 2012
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I contemplated it and couldn't decide, I like it better as "to" tho now :)

Wine is bottled poetry. ~ Robert Louis Stevenson
December 10, 2012
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Thanks for the comments :)

The "to" or "too" concept is interesting, will mull that over some. I had a hard time with cutting the line "In a flurry of red, green, silver, and gold" down it was rough and I got nowhere, might try to change that before it ends.    

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December 11, 2012
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I like that line... didn't stop me at all.

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December 12, 2012
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Funny, that line was the most visual and brought the memories of growing up at my grandparents house. They went all out with a silver tree with long strings of red and gold tinsil everywhere. Granpa had a light with a cover that had four colored lenses that whould rotate and change the tree color constantly. And you want to change it. For shame.

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December 13, 2012
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LOL, well I guess you all convinced me to leave it as is :) , I got my Christmas tree set up last night, it's fake but still looks pretty good, seems like most people have fake trees nowadays, I miss the real ones even if they make a mess.

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December 13, 2012
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Marry Christmas Unique.smile3

December 13, 2012
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Very simple and pretty. The ''to'' spelling is the way I think you should leave it. Short poems that are simple and say it all always remind of me of haiku. Sometimes a bunch of words aren't needed to show real meaning.

December 15, 2012
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Happy holiday's Inolan!

Thanks Grace C :)

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