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All I Want This Year
December 22, 2011
10:38 pm
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. . .I miss you

It's raining out. In the middle of December the snow has changed to rain once again and the icy droplets just won't stop falling. They make me cold. . .Colder than snow itself.

But they remind me of the warmth you bring. . .

It's currently December 21, 2011. Four days until Christmas, three until its Eve. I've gotten your present already. . .

And you continue to fuss over what I want, when all I want is to see you happy. . .

You always worry about me, when really I should be worrying about you. You're family puts you through so much pain, I rarely see you smile anymore. . .

But. . .you'll smile and laugh perfectly fine around a girl that's not me. . .

Did I do something wrong? Please, tell me so I can change that part of me, so I can lock it away and you'll be as happy with me as you are with them!

Am I not good enough anymore?

I miss you, you idiot. I hate the rain- it's like the sky is crying and mocking me for being so imperfect.

You never did like the rain. . .

I prefer snow to rain, however. But that's because if it snows enough, we won't have to avoid each other in the halls and we can talk as long as you want!

So long. ..as it's not a bother to you, that is. . .

Also, it means that when it's cold out. . .

I can have one excuse to have you hug me. . .

I want to see you soon. When we can do whatever you want for however long you want, so long as it makes you happy. Okay?

I really want you to be happy. . .

I don't want you to fake anything around me anymore. You don't need to act strong. You can cry, or rant, or vent, or scream at me all you want, because I'm used to it by now.

It makes me happy to know you still feel. . .

It's currently December 21, 2011. Four days until Christmas, three until its Eve. I've gotten your present already, and you continue to fuss over what to get me.

But all that I really want for Christmas this year, above all else. . .

Is to take off the mask that hides you from me;

To see the boy I fell in love with, and who loves me too.

Someday, I like to think. . .
December 22, 2011
10:41 pm

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I love this work...I want many of the same things you do this year

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December 23, 2011
12:20 am

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Wow, this is a great piece of writing. I love the way its written, and the powerful emotions that are captured within. You are a very talented writer Smile

Perfection; my greatest strength and weakness.
December 23, 2011
1:30 am
Carole Rosa

Good Story. I enjoyed reading it.  Carole

December 23, 2011
10:12 am
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Thanks for sharing this!! You have touched something deep and real and true..


Very niceSmile



Heroes did not return from the expedition / There were no heroes / The unworthy survived Z.Herbert
December 24, 2011
12:29 pm

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A joy to read! Real feeling.

I am a man with one distinguishing manner. I view life as a nonstop roll by circus. Whatever my senses signal to my brain, it is received as humor.
January 10, 2012
2:48 pm

You have displayed an excellent use of metaphors and imagery that reinforces the feelings of this piece, while handling the subject matter in a non-sentimental and poignant manner. Wonderfully done!

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