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A few completely random old poems just 'cause I miss posting...
August 8, 2013
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Eclipse

 

A hand full of stars...

tossed carelessly into the night

sky.

 

A glowing ball of dreams...

twirling around and

playfully chasing our bright, fiery

 

friend –

the Sun.

The thrill of the chase – the thrill

The game – never won – always played

 

The Moon

creeps up

on the daylight

Cat-like

as it prowls and

with the sun – set

 

it pounces

(Eclipse: It captures the Sun, and in

regret, moves along... as easily as it

came... fascinated, only for a moment...

the Moon, “Let’s play the game.”) and

 

the Sun!

He is a glistening, golden

   God.

The Moon chases... the Earth looks up in pity as it spins...

the Sun – shine falls... and now I will say,

“Sweet and warm, lonely Sun, some things,

they stay the same.”

-- 5-18-91

 

Star Dust

 

Are you a traveler?

Are you a swallower of time?

Have you seen all the sights

Worth seeing?

Do you bask in reality,

Or drink form a dreamer’s cup?

Have you chosen the path you walk,

Or did you follow a walker?

Are you visible in light?

Can you see in the dark,

Or are you ghostly and blind?

Have you taken any hearts

On your way through the night?

Do you mingle with the rain?

Do you argue with the air?

Do you dance with the trees?

Do you have star dust in your hair?

--circa 1980s

 

Inspiration

 

Overwhelmed,

I stand and stare,

as if it were illusion.

 

Bullethole red

crawling

about

on

 

the

floor...

And I thought,

shall I cry out,

but what would that prove?

No ears to hear me...

I suppose that is why it has happened here.

Shall I express my sorrows,

but what would that solve?

No hearts to sympathize,

only air to breathe...

That’s everything here,

Though polluted with my thoughts

it still serves a purpose.

 

There’s nothing for me to do now.

 

A clean white wall...

Quite an inspiration.

Shall

I draw?

-- circa 1980s

 

Wine is bottled poetry. ~ Robert Louis Stevenson
August 8, 2013
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Always an enjoyment.  This material does seem to be written by someone young.  The last part "A clean white wall...", that's me looking at the blank page, pre-poem.  I want to draw on it, but I need inpiration.

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August 8, 2013
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@tlhopkinson, I can see a big hair teenager, listening to Duran Duran in her room writing in her notebook. Am I missing the mark? Were there braces involved then? I'm drawing on memory from those days and you are a bit younger than me.

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August 8, 2013
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Nailed it, no braces :)

Wine is bottled poetry. ~ Robert Louis Stevenson
August 8, 2013
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Although I may have already been a hippy kid by the time I wrote these.

Wine is bottled poetry. ~ Robert Louis Stevenson
August 11, 2013
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I really liked Eclipse. I have an affinity for solar system happenings....................... given that it was written twenty two years ago does paint a picture of a younger Iron Princess that had watched a solar eclipse and a sunset or two from remote location....................... I wonder what metaphorical transitions would be made should you REWRITE?...................... Not issuing a challenge............ just thinkin out loud.........

Ciao Bella

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August 11, 2013
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Nah, I don't usually work with these old pieces much. Eclipse could be a good metaphor for something tho...

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August 13, 2013
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Killer didn't bite. I have to say that I can not think of anything that piece could be a describing as a metaphor. Perhaps it is more of a riddle. Always played but never won?

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August 14, 2013
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The sun and the moon can never escape the cycle of the universe... Metaphor? Certainly, anyone who can't escape the cycle... We all wish we could stop it, start something new...

Wine is bottled poetry. ~ Robert Louis Stevenson
August 14, 2013
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Maybe I should have elaborated just a tad more. @tlhopkinson has a style at present that is a metaphorical anomaly. My comment was to invite the prevalent changes that ' Eclipse' the Iron Princess' present style of writing...................

met·a·phor  

/ˈmetəˌfôr/
Noun
  1. A figure of speech in which a word or phrase is applied to an object or action to which it is not literally applicable.
  2. A thing regarded as representative or symbolic of something else, esp. something abstract.
 
 

 

 

" A glowing ball of dreams" =Metaphor for Moon?

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August 14, 2013
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"Bullet Hole Red"...Is that an official Crayon color?

I am a man with one distinguishing manner. I view life as a nonstop roll by circus. Whatever my senses signal to my brain, it is received as humor.
August 14, 2013
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Lol, glad you noticed that line. It's one I've always loved :)

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August 14, 2013
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Noticed that line???????? Though I may be a knuckle dragger of sorts Dear. When it comes to reading poetry, I happen to notice everything I read..................... I happen to love that line too......... Mostly because I think it describes my libido these days............

Ciao Bella

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August 14, 2013
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I think this collection is my favorite of your older poems...all are wonderfully and creatively written! My favorite would have to be "Eclipse." The idea of stars being tossed to the night is a beautiful and magical one.

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August 15, 2013
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You are all too kind. Thank you!

Wine is bottled poetry. ~ Robert Louis Stevenson

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