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besame mucho
September 6, 2015
8:21 pm
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love me
love me forever
lets stretch this moment
to the end of time

love me
love me forever
let's give meaning to
dancing in darkness

let's give up knowing
what good is knowing
when everything we know
might just be a minor
personal dream

let's give up being sure
what can be sure but how
I longed for you
how impossible that you
are holding me now

let's give up tomorrow
and whatever dream that was
before I found your timeless eyes

love me
love me forever
love me forever
and whatever comes beyond

September 9, 2015
3:46 pm
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I really like the repetition and word imagery in this one... I love the phrases "let's stretch this moment" and "before I found your timeless eyes." The rhythm is also nicely unusual. For me, I read it somewhere between a plea and a chant. The lack of punctuation also adds an interesting touch. Nice write!

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