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Drops On A Window
December 12, 2012
8:35 am
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Drops on a window

Scattered about

Not one the same

Each one its own

Collide to make one

In true binding

Working together

To make a whole

While the world around

Collides together

But not to make one

To destroy the other

Brother against sister

Mother and child separated

If only we could be like droplet

In a world thin as glass

Ready to break

And scatter us about

'We are all the same, what ever we look like and who ever we want to be with, we are equal' -Ericka
December 12, 2012
12:21 pm

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Touching words to read. " A world thin as glass" what a great line that is.



I am a man with one distinguishing manner. I view life as a nonstop roll by circus. Whatever my senses signal to my brain, it is received as humor.
December 12, 2012
1:22 pm

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Yes, agreed, great metaphor in this piece.

Wine is bottled poetry. ~ Robert Louis Stevenson
December 25, 2012
11:47 pm

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This is an amazing poem, love the drops/world metaphor. I can't help but note how well this fits together as well, like the way the meaning reflected onto the format, not only is there extraordinary characteristics in a simple rain drop but there is an extraordinary message in your minimalistically written poem :)  

Perfection; my greatest strength and weakness.
December 26, 2012
9:24 pm

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Drops on a window...the title alone is poetry! I love the flow of this piece, and the lines are very beautiful in an almost haunting way. The slight change in the poem-about brothers and sisters against one another and mothers and children separated-added a feeling of something a little darker than peace for me from the beauty and meaning in the other lines. In short-I. Love. This. Poem! Well done!

My identity can be found in my writing
December 28, 2012
9:14 am

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This is soo fitting for everything that's been going on in the world for a while now.  The way you described it as rain falling on a window and "a world as thin as glass" is just perfect.  everything about this poem is perfect.    

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