Laments and hatred
Cloak your mind
And make you blind.
Where will you go,
Now that you've lost everything
You have ever known?
Lost all the love you had,
And departed from friends
That you've cared for so deeply,
What are you, now?
The world feels heavy,
Lifting it all on your shoulders,
Alone and lonely;
Smiles and laughter do not cover
Your sorrow or sadness.
There is only endless lamentation.
But you separate from reality
Whenever you dream,
And so you sleep and sleep and sleep,
Until you think no more
Of the pains ahead.
Straighten your spine
And readjust the world on your shoulders,
For you have yet a long journey to walk.
Bravo Night_Sky. You've eclipsed the boundaries of human disparity with this poem. And you have come full circle in your evolution as a poet by simplifying the subject matter here. There are scads of such writings of a similar subject that tend to go on and on making me want to hit the off button. I firmly believe that for every poem there is just the right amount of words. And that the unwritten word is as important as those that are penned. Gives the reader pause for thought, allows reflection of self and surroundings.The ending is very similar to a line my Father used to offer when I was down ...................
Write on Night_Sky...........................
Thank you for your comment, @Killerelite Although I doubt that I've come full circle yet, simply for the fact that in terms of evolution, no matter in what, there is no 'full circle'. It is sort of like the sign of infinity, evolution, I mean. Endless, endless, endless and boundless. I know the feeling of ongoing poems that seem far too much (I've written a few of them myself), but sometimes, you just want to project every single thought of that subject into the poem because you want your message to desperately come across, as if its revelation could be the ultimate redemption of humanity. What I'm trying to say is that I get where you're coming from; Sometimes, silence is louder than any spoken word.
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