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I know a girl
April 15, 2014
8:30 pm
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I.      I know a girl who's
        And imperfect.
        And so wonderful and amazing I can't even comprehend it.

II.     I know a girl who
        Opened her wrists
        In hopes that it would
        Leech out all of her demons and let her go.
        It didn't.

III.   I know a girl whose
        Mind is so infinite
        Comparing her to the universe
        Isn't good enough.

IV.    I know a girl who
        Wanted so badly to be free
        Three times she tried to break out.
        Three times she didn't quite make it.

V.     I know a girl who
        Still fills my world with light
        Even if it's with a few scattered words.

VI.   I know a girl who
        I want to save
        Even if it'll pull me back into the dark.

VII.  My world is never dark with her.

VIII. Her world is so shadowed.

IX.   Maybe it's time I turned on a light.

Someday, I like to think. . .
April 16, 2014
1:40 am

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I enjoyed this one. It tells a story and ends in a revelation. I always like a good ending that could be the start of an even better story.  

I am a man with one distinguishing manner. I view life as a nonstop roll by circus. Whatever my senses signal to my brain, it is received as humor.
April 16, 2014
9:13 am

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Lovely piece. My daughter recently created a found poem based on the concept of perfection and how we view it, specifically as young women. If you're interested, you can see it here on my poetry site: http://trishhopkinson.com/2014/04/12/my-daughter-finished-her-first-found-poem/

Wine is bottled poetry. ~ Robert Louis Stevenson

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