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Oceanic Stars (original early 90s, latest edit 2002)
June 8, 2013
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The night sky,

a thick, liquid mass

  and the stars floating in the darkness,

their twinkling blurred,

  all of it shifting like melted glass.

Rippling,

as if a pebble was tossed carelessly upward

              ripples turn colorless jellyfish and gray-blue dolphins,

    sea creatures in the first dimension.

 

Golden-brown mountains

  support the weight of the oceanic stars,

               standing boldly and tall.

     with their sharp, jagged personalities

        as if the sky might fall and drown them.

The cliffs

expose their white, unshy,

  the layer beneath their tough, stony complexions.

                in the darkness it looks like the last bit of snow,

       but when the full moon shines

         on the other side,

      they are white waterfalls,

   you can’t hear splashing or gurgling

                   only the scratching sound

                 of your soles upon gravel

              and squishing mud

           as you walk

 

And marvel

at flames of the fire.

              staring dizzily at orange

    and white coals glowing,

       absorbing the warmth like electricity,

                your eyes dance to it’s energy,

              as the flames change shape and color,

           like a chameleon with purpose.

 

Glancing around I notice I am alone,

but I can hear the others

their laughter carried distortedly on the wind.

Just one wandering thought

and they’ve returned...

 

We’re homebound again.

 

A/N: Trippy dippy... guess you could say this poem was an "experiment" LOL

Wine is bottled poetry. ~ Robert Louis Stevenson
June 8, 2013
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Wow this is one of my favorites of yours. There is so much detail and description in every line, my favorite being "as if the sky might fall and drown them."-only because it tells a story, of course! :) I am not fond of drownings. Again, I can't get over this poem. Great write!

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June 8, 2013
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"Dude.... Its all wavy and stuff."

"Yeah, I was like rocking  back and forth."

"She said distortedly."

"No way dude... Is that a word?"

"Probably not, but I ain't sayin' nothin"

"She's a stoner?"

"What?"

"Trippy dippy man!"

If I could write like you Trisha I'd be a woman. Finesse is your friend. That's for sure. 

I am a man with one distinguishing manner. I view life as a nonstop roll by circus. Whatever my senses signal to my brain, it is received as humor.
June 8, 2013
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OK, @Forgewright I have to say something at this point... Trish... not Trisha... that extra syllable makes it feel like you're calling me by a completely wrong name... like if I all of a sudden called you Bobby or something... just weird. Maybe you should try to write like me... maybe I should DARE you to try... and maybe I should try to write something Forge-ish... hmmm... what say you Roberta?

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June 13, 2013
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Then I'll just stick with @tlhopkinson. I liked this poem in spite of myself. Generally not much for the 'Trippy Dippy' for lack of better words. There are several descriptive and colorful poetic lines that I really like. I guess the fact that it seems to offer several poems in a poem moves me to enjoy it. So Timothy Leary does TRISH Hopkinson in the 90' is becoming of an artist. And it does create impact to the nth power. Well done..............................

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