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May 9, 2013
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A robin’s song wakes

me before the sun, washing

the night from my skin.

Wine is bottled poetry. ~ Robert Louis Stevenson
May 11, 2013
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I like the poem, but I think you miscounted the syllables. The first line has one syllable too much and the last line has one syllable missing. I'm not criticizing or anything, but I'm just saying.... Sorry...

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May 11, 2013
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Thanks for noticing! I meant to come back and edit this piece anyway... the first line has 5 syllables, maybe you read it "awake." But I am definitely missing a syllable on the last line... good catch! I'll fix it right now... sounds like it needs a "the" anyway :) . Oh and no need to say sorry. I appreciate it!

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May 11, 2013
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No problem. Although I am pretty sure that the first line has one syllable too much.

ARoBin'sSongWakes

The 's counts as a syllable, since it's a shortening of an actual word. If you would leave out the 's, it would be "A robin his song wakes", so it would be six syllables and not five. Sorry if I'm wrong, but I think that the 's does counts as a syllable...

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May 11, 2013
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I'll have to research that for sure! Poetry I've seen often adds the apostrophe to shorten words to the syllable count needed. Could be a dialect thing also. I'll do some digging. This is my kind of discussion--we are all such a bunch of word nerds :)

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Wine is bottled poetry. ~ Robert Louis Stevenson

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