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An Echo
October 15, 2014
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A divine nymph, once a minstrel of song,
abided blithely and pranced in the woods.
Her voice, the echo of love never known.

When Hera came seeking, she played along
with tempting tales to persuade the goddess.
Untruths become a reflection of sound.

This escape for Zeus didn’t go unfound.
She soon learned of his promiscuousness.
Her voice, the echo of love never known.

The goddess then punished the nymph alone.
Echo will only speak others’ last words.
Untruths become a reflection of sound.

The nymph wept until she turned into stone,
her ghostly reprise in reverberations.
Her voice, the echo of love never known.

Still in silence, the rhythmic pulse of blood,
of human breath, of the heart and its thrusts,
untruths become a reflection of sound.
Her voice, the echo of love never known.

Wine is bottled poetry. ~ Robert Louis Stevenson
October 26, 2014
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I think this just became one of my favorites of yours... The word choices and repetitions are lovely and paint such a vivid, passionate picture. 

I love that there is a story and possibly even a moral/teaching all in one. At least, I thought of how an echo today can pretty much work the same way with unrequited love. I also adore the line "Untruths become a reflection of sound." I think there is so much possible interpretation to be done with that one strong line. Truly thought-provoking.

Amazing write, and highly enjoyed!

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October 26, 2014
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Thank you for your kind comments @SerenaLantha. I wrote this for a specific Mythic Poetry Series and oddly they selected a different poem from my submission. This one took a fair amount of research and is in villanelle form, which is one of my favorites but is not that easy to write correctly! I'm so glad you enjoyed it.

Wine is bottled poetry. ~ Robert Louis Stevenson
October 29, 2014
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The Villanelle is a very difficult form to do correctly.  So, good effort.  You know I didn't think Echo had a choice.  I have a feeling that Zeus threaten her somehow.  Hera, not being able to punish Zeus, made Echo pay, which is unjust I think you'll agree.  There's a continuation of the story with Narcissus in which Echo does not do well.  She is left being less than a shadow of the happy nymph she was, or maybe is. 

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