No merit in wishing
for a wish fills no cup.
But gather yourself and
move forward.
Life then begins
with new shape
to the future.
No merit in dreaming
for dreams take much
of one’s time.
But a goal that’s been set
can be met
with great effort
offers reward of accomplishment
and pride.
No merit in hatred
for hate spawns
a litter of evil
that spreads like a virus
infecting all as it grows.
Would it be proper
to wish for a dream
not to hate.
Brilliant @Killerelite
The wait has been long but the rewards are huge in this return to poetic form. I loved the whole poem, each stanza was beautifully crafted and the ending wraps it up incredibly well.
Write on...
Jam
Thanks Jam.............. Means a great deal to me to receive such praise from a talented writer...... Hope things are well across the Pond mate........... I'll look forward to reading more poetry from @Jamboree and promise to make time in the near future to read Mars 127...............
Semper Fi
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Oh pish posh @Killerelite your praise is too kind.
Things are going good across The Pond. Mars-127 is coming along nicely and I've set myself an Easter deadline for finishing the third/fourth draft (depends what you count as a full draft). And who knows I could be sending out queries by the summer, wouldn't that be scary!
I look forward to reading more of your work now that you have returned to the poetry world.
Jam
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Killerelite
Well it's about damn time! I love the "spawns a litter of evil". Great piece... oh ye of few poems lately :).
It is indeed about damn time @tlhopkinson .................. Thank you for the praise......... And all I had to do was read the morning news for inspiration...............
Semper Fi
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enjoyed the read
thankyou
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Killerelite
I missed this...how dare I miss this...
Well, wonderfully thought-provoking as always, though now I am expecting nothing less! I agree that "spawns a litter of evil" is such a strong line and image. The separation between dreaming and doing is also portrayed well. Great write!
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