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No Merit
September 23, 2014
10:01 am
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No merit in wishing
for a wish fills no cup.
But gather yourself and
move forward.
Life then begins
with new shape
to the future.

No merit in dreaming
for dreams take much
of one’s time.
But a goal that’s been set
can be met
with great effort
offers reward of accomplishment
and pride.

No merit in hatred
for hate spawns
a litter of evil
that spreads like a virus
infecting all as it grows.

Would it be proper

to wish for a dream

not to hate.

Those individuals who deem themselves perfect barely scratch an elbow in their fall from grace. Wm Steele
September 23, 2014
2:59 pm
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Brilliant @Killerelite

The wait has been long but the rewards are huge in this return to poetic form. I loved the whole poem, each stanza was beautifully crafted and the ending wraps it up incredibly well.

Write on...

Jam

'Books aren't written, they're rewritten. Including your own. It is one of the hardest things to accept, especially after the seventh rewrite hasn't quite done it... Michael Crichton
September 24, 2014
9:20 am
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Thanks Jam.............. Means a great deal to me to receive such praise from a talented writer...... Hope things are well across the Pond mate........... I'll look forward to reading more poetry from @Jamboree and promise to make time in the near future to read Mars 127...............

Semper Fi

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Jamboree
Those individuals who deem themselves perfect barely scratch an elbow in their fall from grace. Wm Steele
September 24, 2014
5:40 pm
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Oh pish posh @Killerelite your praise is too kind.

Things are going good across The Pond. Mars-127 is coming along nicely and I've set myself an Easter deadline for finishing the third/fourth draft (depends what you count as a full draft). And who knows I could be sending out queries by the summer, wouldn't that be scary!

I look forward to reading more of your work now that you have returned to the poetry world.

Jam

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Killerelite
'Books aren't written, they're rewritten. Including your own. It is one of the hardest things to accept, especially after the seventh rewrite hasn't quite done it... Michael Crichton
September 25, 2014
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Well it's about damn time! I love the "spawns a litter of evil". Great piece... oh ye of few poems lately :).

Wine is bottled poetry. ~ Robert Louis Stevenson
September 26, 2014
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It is indeed about damn time @tlhopkinson .................. Thank you for the praise......... And all I had to do was read the morning news for inspiration...............

Semper Fi

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Those individuals who deem themselves perfect barely scratch an elbow in their fall from grace. Wm Steele
October 2, 2014
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enjoyed the read

 

thankyou

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Killerelite
October 26, 2014
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I missed this...how dare I miss this...

 

Well, wonderfully thought-provoking as always, though now I am expecting nothing less! I agree that "spawns a litter of evil" is such a strong line and image. The separation between dreaming and doing is also portrayed well. Great write! 

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