No merit in wishing
for a wish fills no cup.
But gather yourself and
Life then begins
with new shape
to the future.
No merit in dreaming
for dreams take much
of one’s time.
But a goal that’s been set
can be met
with great effort
offers reward of accomplishment
No merit in hatred
for hate spawns
a litter of evil
that spreads like a virus
infecting all as it grows.
Would it be proper
to wish for a dream
not to hate.
The wait has been long but the rewards are huge in this return to poetic form. I loved the whole poem, each stanza was beautifully crafted and the ending wraps it up incredibly well.
Thanks Jam.............. Means a great deal to me to receive such praise from a talented writer...... Hope things are well across the Pond mate........... I'll look forward to reading more poetry from @Jamboree and promise to make time in the near future to read Mars 127...............
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Oh pish posh @Killerelite your praise is too kind.
Things are going good across The Pond. Mars-127 is coming along nicely and I've set myself an Easter deadline for finishing the third/fourth draft (depends what you count as a full draft). And who knows I could be sending out queries by the summer, wouldn't that be scary!
I look forward to reading more of your work now that you have returned to the poetry world.
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It is indeed about damn time @tlhopkinson .................. Thank you for the praise......... And all I had to do was read the morning news for inspiration...............
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enjoyed the read
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I missed this...how dare I miss this...
Well, wonderfully thought-provoking as always, though now I am expecting nothing less! I agree that "spawns a litter of evil" is such a strong line and image. The separation between dreaming and doing is also portrayed well. Great write!
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