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the dogs are barking
May 23, 2014
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the dogs are barking
others clutch their clubs
a lion dies today
anything so beautiful
should never have been allowed
May 24, 2014
1:23 pm
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Hmmm... I know what you were going for here, but I get more of a psychopath beauty from it... as if it's the killing that's beautiful. 

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Wine is bottled poetry. ~ Robert Louis Stevenson
May 24, 2014
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i have to agree with tlhopkinson on this i steered clear not knowing what my thought was,did seam alittle strange but who am to say others may paint a different picture on this piece or maybe has we knew what was said needs a tweak to not make it not so abstract that it seamed a little uncomfortable if that's rlaughight word to use here

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