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Blue Benny
March 22, 2015
3:41 pm

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Benny the blue jay had a broken beak

could not sing a single song

opened his mouth with two halves gone

all he could do was squeak


one day Benny was high in a tree

his hunger pains looked for a meal

Benny's lack of beak meant meals had to be free

saw a camp near a lake by a fresh trod trail


Benny had developed almost invisible stealth

could swoop motionless and snatch

ate good all year and in perfect health

Benny was not prepared for his catch


not the small cookie or the piece of bread

his balance went off with the weight

and stuck solid on his head

Benny corrected his flight before he hit


he landed in the middle of a thorn filled thistle

hurt and tired he passed out from the fright

with his head stuck inside a musician’s tin whistle

the musician looked for it most of the night


and heard it the next day

as Benny tried every breath he felt more alone

sweet music gave his position away

and the musician peeled back the rows of thorn


he took Benny the Blue jay back to his home

doctors confirmed with many X-rays

the design of the whistle was lodged in the Blue jay’s bone

the kind hearted musician kept and fed Benny the Blue jay


they developed an act with the passing of years

and received many ovations of cheers

the musician played a drum beat to an Irish tune

Benny played the tin whistle as he flew around the room

March 28, 2015
2:02 pm

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Such an imaginative story. Impressed as always.

Wine is bottled poetry. ~ Robert Louis Stevenson
April 3, 2015
12:16 pm

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I agree-the imagination and creativity behind this is very impressive. I love the sing-song quality in addition to all the sweet and subtle rhymes. The alliteration at the beginning is also a nice touch! 

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