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Melancholy Morning
May 14, 2014
6:55 pm

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Did God forget

To paint the sky today?

It seems so cold,

Clouded, and gray.

Sweet sunrise came

But startled my stare,

For my eyes failed

To focus on a sky so bare;

Sunlight shone

Through the clouds,

But it revealed no warmth

Nor color proud.

The melancholy morning

Could not deny

The dismal details

Of this dreary sky;

Noon knew not when

To rise nor what to do,

For it relied too greatly

On the midday’s blue;

Afternoon appeared

And tried to alter

The sky, but the gray

Refused to falter;

Evening approached

While day said goodbye,

But the falling sun

Could not affect the sky.

Night now threatens

The day’s sky to take,

But, suddenly,

Its colors awake-

To the ends of the earth

The colors stretch and run,

Wishing the world a good night

Before the setting of the sun.

I think God just remembered

To paint the sky today;

For tomorrow’s color  

I will have to pray-

A vibrant sky is my cry

For now and forever;

Though, I suppose,

It is better late than never.

My identity can be found in my writing
May 15, 2014
1:32 am

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This poem puts me in mind of God giving a wink at the last minute. A wink just for you!

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I am a man with one distinguishing manner. I view life as a nonstop roll by circus. Whatever my senses signal to my brain, it is received as humor.
May 15, 2014
4:14 am

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Did god forget to paint the sky

what a inspirational opening to a well written piece.

i think here in England, god has taken a whole year off from decorating ha ha

laughgood job enjoyed !

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May 15, 2014
10:09 am

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I love the alliteration in "Melancholy Morning." So refreshing to see some new @SerenaLantha work today! This piece reminded me of a wonderful Joni Mitchell song... you can read the lyrics here: http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/jonimitchell/chelseamorning.html, but I recommend listening to it here:

Wine is bottled poetry. ~ Robert Louis Stevenson
May 15, 2014
5:36 pm

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Bravo @SerenaLantha  Last things first............ You have such an affinity for writing an absolutely perfect ending to all your work........... And I've come to expect that when reading your poetry.... You never disappoint in that regard..................... This poem reads a rhyme that is flawless start to finish. Spiritual with a reckoning for a new day after gloomy gray skies................. And did I mention spot on with the ending................. Reading this poem capped my day with a full cup of well written verse.....................

Semper Fi

Write on @SerenaLantha ...... write on

Those individuals who deem themselves perfect barely scratch an elbow in their fall from grace. Wm Steele
May 29, 2014
10:51 am

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Thanks, everyone! @Forgewright God giving a wink....well, now that is an interesting idea! I may have to think about that one!

@craigb12 Thanks! And haha, maybe the decorating is just going a little slowly...

@tlhopkinson Cool song! I don't think I had ever heard of her before, but I can see the similarity. And, yes, I feel plenty of guilt for not writing or coming on more regularly... But I am slowly getting some poetry ideas so hopefully that will change.

@Killerelite I hope my endings will continue to meet your expectations! I had actually had the first two lines in my head for probably six months but never wrote a poem for them until now. Thanks for all your kind words!

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