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Wish for worse
June 15, 2013
1:32 pm
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What a cruel world is the one we live in

Where two souls got together

All went well, but that does not matter

Because after a short while

One decided to fly higher.

And so he left the poor crying child

Alone, in despair, a future pariah.

 

well...I'm supposed to say something smart now: POTATO!
June 15, 2013
1:43 pm
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I really like this.  The divorce rate today is rather sad, and at times is even worse when a child grows up without one of their parental figures in their life, or both.  Very well written. 

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June 15, 2013
1:57 pm
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Thank you:) I'm glad you like it

well...I'm supposed to say something smart now: POTATO!
June 21, 2013
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This really captures the loss involved in separation...You wrote it well! I love the flow of this especially.

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June 25, 2013
1:50 pm
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Thank you:) I really tried to compress a lot in very few lines

well...I'm supposed to say something smart now: POTATO!
June 30, 2013
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I see this describing the death of one parent not a divorce. The flying higher tells me this. It is a blessing when the child gains strength and independence from such a loss.

I am a man with one distinguishing manner. I view life as a nonstop roll by circus. Whatever my senses signal to my brain, it is received as humor.
July 1, 2013
4:56 pm
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Well, you the poem has a 2 sided way of interpreting it...so, you could say it isn't necessarly a divorce

well...I'm supposed to say something smart now: POTATO!

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