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June 25, 2014
8:02 pm
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I am moored to you. You’re heavy,
cast iron next to silk stockings,
stretched thin and pulled above my middle.
I hadn’t known admiration until your sheltering eyes.
All that is weak in me, stops at you.

The day you studied me, your head
tilted like a springtime robin, standing at the railing
as I nursed our once infant daughter in the Lazy-boy.
Somehow I felt it. I caught your stare,
your pride and approval.

I am drawn by you. Your thirst
lifts from within and never empties,
a source in all directions, my watermark—
like a convex meniscus at the rim, just enough
pressure, considerate and gentle.

Last evening, your glance brushed by
the soft and low-cut valley of my breast, a lingering
whisper I pretended not to hear as I moved
to lift my wineglass. Somehow I felt it
and tried to hush the glow.

I am encased by you. Your desire,
a pressed hip-pocket handkerchief
re-folds around me, an envelope to the letter.
If the rain hadn’t come, forced us in and under cover,
I may have missed you.

Wine is bottled poetry. ~ Robert Louis Stevenson
June 28, 2014
8:41 am
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Wow! Writer your poem is the Everlasting Gobstopper of the world of poetry. A smooth seductive tone in this poem makes it very alluring. You've given this piece perfect timing with your placement of "I am moored to you." "I am drawn by you." "I am encased by you."  And your description of the title in the third stanza is remarkable and really heated things up for the rest of the poem. Kind of like watching a scene unfold on the big screen. Sweaty palms, whispered voices. Perfect ending.

Those individuals who deem themselves perfect barely scratch an elbow in their fall from grace. Wm Steele
June 29, 2014
12:31 am
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Ok, the poem is awesome but that reply had me laughing. 

Wow! Writer your poem is the Everlasting Gobstopper of the world of poetry.

Let's see. That poem went over like a McRib at a weight-loss convention.

I got one hand in my pocket and the other one's giving a peace sign.....

 

I know who wrote it!!!!!!! the poem, that is......

like a convex meniscus at the rim Are we allowed to use language like that here??????

I am a man with one distinguishing manner. I view life as a nonstop roll by circus. Whatever my senses signal to my brain, it is received as humor.
June 29, 2014
8:49 am
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Haha very funny reply. McRib at weight loss convention. The poem itself great.

Those individuals who deem themselves perfect barely scratch an elbow in their fall from grace. Wm Steele
July 8, 2014
10:05 am
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Very seductive and intriguing... definitely something different. Well written.

“The greatest treasures are those invisible to the eye but found by the heart.”~Anon
July 28, 2014
12:30 am
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Wow, I was totally wrong in guessing who wrote which comments... Y'all never cease to amaze me. I read this poem publicly recently and rec'd a great audience response. Thanks for the comments!!

Wine is bottled poetry. ~ Robert Louis Stevenson
July 31, 2014
4:00 pm
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Wow, I think this is one of your best! It is stunning in an almost carefree way. The seduction and allurement in the tone and the slow pace especially drew me in. I have to agree with all the above comments-your way of explaining the title was well done and added to the reader's knowledge without taking away from the poem's concept or theme. It really is like a beautiful, heated story unfolding before all our eyes.

I can understand why this won!

Congratulations!

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July 31, 2014
4:58 pm
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Thanks so much @SerenaLantha ! Your comments mean a lot :)

Wine is bottled poetry. ~ Robert Louis Stevenson
August 1, 2014
5:27 am
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I enjoyed reading this piece

chance meetings and life together  ... I like

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