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Spicy
February 15, 2013
7:11 pm
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You’re my salt shaker baby.

You add flavor and zing to my life

when I’ve had a bitter grapefruit day

or a bland tomato sandwich week.

A little shake as you walk by

or when you greet me on the street

makes my cookie dough rise.

There’s no MSG for me—

like the salt seasons the sea

you dissolve into my soul.

 

You’re my pepper grinder lover.

You give my stew a little kick

when the world is plain and lacking

or the celery in my bloody mary

just ain’t cuttin’ it Sunday morning.

A little twist to the left

and then back to the right

makes it just spicy enough

to drive away my boredom

and quench my yearning.

 

You’re my sugar shot darling.

You sweeten up my morning latte

with pleasantness on my tongue,

change the perspective of my day

and lead me out into the sun.

A pump or two into my cup,

maybe caramel or sweet vanilla,

drowns out the noise, slows the pace

gives me the energy and vigor

to enjoy myself.

 

Though life, I know, is worth living

it’s the taste of your essence

your pizzazz and your zest

that makes this mundane existence

a pleasure to partake in—

tantalizing and delicious.

Wine is bottled poetry. ~ Robert Louis Stevenson
February 16, 2013
12:15 pm
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So many lines in this poem made me smile :) . Very creative metaphors. I really like the tone switches from playful to serious. This is a great reminder of how others can lift us up and make each day more pleasurable. Nice work!

My fav. lines were-

"A little shake as you walk by
or when you greet me on the street
makes my cookie dough rise."

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Perfection; my greatest strength and weakness.
June 15, 2013
4:10 pm
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Ba-da-boom ba-da-bing, I read this when you posted it but never replied and forgot about it. I found it by mistake today while hacking the site..... I mean checking the security of the server. The word racy comes to mind. That's what metaphors tend to do. It shows the readers thought process. Either you were talking about sex or making a nice Italian dinner. It contain a lot of words that could be use in a Harlequin Romance novel. 

Rising, grinding, quenching, twisting, pumping, shaking, stewing, spicy, yearning, ripping tearing smacking kicking choking cutting.

My mistake, It is just Italians eating dinner........

 

Forgewright 

I am a man with one distinguishing manner. I view life as a nonstop roll by circus. Whatever my senses signal to my brain, it is received as humor.
June 15, 2013
4:54 pm
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Don't kid yourself, everything is about sex, especially everything in poetry :)

Wine is bottled poetry. ~ Robert Louis Stevenson
June 15, 2013
4:55 pm
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Oh and FYI, this one won the Arts Fest Ironpen back in 2007 and was printed in the Valentines edition of my university's newspaper this year.

Wine is bottled poetry. ~ Robert Louis Stevenson
June 15, 2013
5:17 pm
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Hmmm. Sex sells. I'll have to give it a try. Writing it i mean.

I am a man with one distinguishing manner. I view life as a nonstop roll by circus. Whatever my senses signal to my brain, it is received as humor.
June 16, 2013
12:50 am
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LOL, careful with that prompt :)

Wine is bottled poetry. ~ Robert Louis Stevenson
June 16, 2013
10:55 am
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@!#$%^%^*^&&@$%^ WTF? It sure didn't take you guys long to get off the beaten path. @tlhopkinson. Really? Everything is about sex? I'll try and forget that comment when a TSA agent tries to pat me down. Or when I go for a Colonoscopy. If the attending physician seems a tad anxious and happens to be sporting a woody. "Hey Doc. Take the long way, stick the camera down my throat, cause we ain't going through the keister!" 

@Forgewright. I hope if you're gonna write something steamy, it has humor. I'm not going there just yet. Word polishing the act of getting laid seems a bit torturous. And should you take on the endeavor please write about protected sex. Lord know we don't need any STD's spreading at Thoughts...................

Those individuals who deem themselves perfect barely scratch an elbow in their fall from grace. Wm Steele
June 16, 2013
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Ha, Right on. I would say a few verses about teenage backseat fumbling would work. The excitement of base achievements followed by complete incompetence would read well. I remember thinking I would have to be able to snap my fingers like the Fonz to undue a bra. Hell, I still couldn't do that!

Forgewright 

I am a man with one distinguishing manner. I view life as a nonstop roll by circus. Whatever my senses signal to my brain, it is received as humor.
June 16, 2013
1:03 pm
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Everything ends up being related to sex in some way... sex is almost as hard (um, difficult) to write about as love without sounding like a cheeseball. I agree, that adding humor would make the cheesiness appropriate. At any rate, some poets can and do write poems that aren't technically on the topic of sex, but DO include plenty of words and phrases to get the imagination going. So yes, if you were to write a poem about a colonoscopy, I am sure someone, somewhere, would find something sexual in it. Yeah, ok, I feel an STD stinging my eyes... best stop commenting :) .

Wine is bottled poetry. ~ Robert Louis Stevenson

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